Can someone take a look at this part writing / chords?

[wicki]

Is there anyone who could please take a look at this attached GIF file, and especially the area of the 3 red boxes that I have added to the image? I'm trying to figure out if it is ok to have the notes this far apart, and if not, how should I voice it so that everything would turn out ok? Thanks for any help that can be provided!

Edit: By the way this is for a blues piece for clarinet and piano.

[SweeDee]

Wiki,

I'm a bit confused with the chord progression of the song. As far as I can tell you begin playing a blues in F but by the third measure it moves to Bmin then Cmin in the fourth. The sixth measure contains Bflat min, Eflat min and D7. All these chords leave no discernable key.

The notes in your first red box in the fourth measure make a Cmin flat nine. The tension you are hearing is probably a result of the of the close proximity of the C and B notes. If your looking for a Cmin flat nine you'll want to substitute a fifth (G) for the extra C note.

[arnold]

i can't comment on your progression
but your voicings for piano are ok
measure 10 is a little akward

i might suggest that is you have root and 7 in left hand
and 3 and melody in the right hand like you have you can't go wrong